Hey guys. I've re-cut the clown sequence. Thoughts? Based on the suggestion to hand out scenes to other people, I'm also handing it to Cris to see what he can come up with.
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APL Sc. 9 Cut 3 from Jesse Chapman on Vimeo.
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4 comments:
Huge improvement! The beat is much stronger. I still am not sure if you need Josh to put his hand up too. I think if you cut it at the girls doing the gesture and leave it at that, it could be pitch-perfect. That's my thought. But this version works much better already! Nice job! :)
Phil, thanks so much for the feedback. Most of my work now is trying to really replicate the 1990s feel.
There was something weirdly powerful about seeing Josh's face full screen as the first image of the clown, rather than the wide shot you have. But I like it this way too. The flow is better and I like the tighter beginning (she's in the fridge). I'm not sure about that weird push at the end. Other than that, this plays much better (more screaming is funny).
Thanks, Rich. In the final cut I added the CU of Josh again like you suggested. Worked well.
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